My goal for this paper is to articulate how the internet provides students with a tool for learning and pursuing their purpose. To achieve this goal I plan to connect and synthesize the ideas of Bill Wasik, Sam Anderson, and my choice author, Sugata Mitra. I plan to distinguish between the populations of children, students, and young adults by trying to stay focused on the topic of students throughout my paper. To make my first claim stronger I will reference the book They Say I Say and use one of the transitional cues mentioned in the book. I will make my second paragraph more specific by talking about how the internet provides students with a variety of information to use to benefit their learning. I will also try to be more specific about how “the bandwagon effect” can be used as a tool for learning. I plan to include more summery in my concluding paragraph and revisit the ideas mentioned throughout the paper. My biggest challenge will be specifying how the bandwagon effect can be used as a tool for learning and clarifying how students are able to create something out of nothing with the help of the internet and technology.
Well done! Remember–as you tackle those challenges you mentioned, if you find that your writing process generates new ideas or new conclusions, this is a good thing!