Revision Strategy

Revision Plan for Essay Prompt 2

My goal for this paper is to prove how the wealth of constant information is weakening young minds. I plan to expand upon how the digitally distracting world forces young people to multitask, puts them at risk for mental illness, distracts them from growing up, and increases their usage of drugs. I need to revise the organization of my paper so that the topics flow more easily. I will use some of the strategies I mentioned in my Learning Log 1 to approach my writing as more of a recursive process. To think more about the global edits of my paper, I will go back and look to see how my thesis sentence lists the claims I will be making and compare it to the order of the paragraphs. If I find that the order of the claim paragraphs do not coordinate with the order of my thesis, I plan to switch up how my thesis lists the claims I make in my paper. During an activity we did in class, we wrote down the claims we were trying to make in our paper on note cards and switched around the order of the note cards until we found an arrangement that made the most sense. I plan to do this to fix the organization of my claim paragraphs and then fix my thesis statement to match. I also need to revise how I introduce the texts I use for evidence. The activity with the note cards will also help me figure out when to introduce the texts. The most challenging part of this revision will be finding the order of my paragraphs that makes the most sense and making sure my concluding paragraph still connects to my thesis.